After this peer review session I received really good feedback and a lot of positive things. I took away that I need to make sure it is a personal opinionated essay. As well as to add more context of the two articles in my introduction. I also need to try and represent the opposing side more so it is not so focused on my argument and it more as a whole. I also had specific strong claims throughout my essay that I could put towards forming my thesis since I have yet to write one. So I am going to start by fixing my introduction with adding more context of the David Foster Wallace essay and What the Crow Knows as well. Then start forming my thesis to go along with my essay. I have to add another paragraph and form another claim, as well as finish up my conclusion. I have some sentences I need to fix to let them form better but I don’t think that will be hard. I think making another paragraph to go with my argument might be difficult because my essay is already so long. So I might pull from my analysis throughout the essay and shorten it up so it is not so repetitive.